From c295c22c8d00e5a33b94ef3f366343b686f3afaa Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Aug 2023 11:28:28 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 1/6] Content Updates

---
 src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html | 8 +++++++-
 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html b/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
index 805cb6927..2adf0b99c 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
@@ -2,7 +2,13 @@
 {% load static field_helpers %}
 
 {% block form_instructions %}
-  <p>We’d like to contact other employees in your organization about your domain request. For example, they could be involved in managing your organization or its technical infrastructure. <strong>This information will help us assess your eligibility for a .gov domain.</strong> These contacts should be in addition to you and your authorizing official. They should be employees of your organization.</p>
+  <p>To help us assess your eligibility for a .gov domain, please provide contact information for at least two other employees from your organization.
+    <ul class="usa-list">
+      <li>They must be employees who are clearly and publicly affiliated with your organization and familiar with your domain request. </li>
+      <li>They do not need to be involved with the technical management of your domain (although they can be). </li>
+      <li>We typically don’t reach out to these employees, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate with you, the requestor. </li>
+    </ul>
+  </p>
 
 {% endblock %}
 

From f6f6f54ec7a9109e0e76e3f3c29b9e8d66cd01d2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Aug 2023 11:44:09 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 2/6] Content Updates: Authorizing Official

---
 src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html | 4 ++--
 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html b/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
index dead1974f..0674b3f7b 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
@@ -6,13 +6,13 @@
     Who is the authorizing official for your organization?
   </h2>
 
-<p>Your authorizing official is the person within your organization who can authorize your domain request. This is generally the highest-ranking or highest-elected official in your organization.</p>
+<p>Your authorizing official is the person within your organization who can authorize your domain request. This must be a person in a role of significant, executive responsibility within the organization.</p>
 
   <div class="ao_example">
     {% include "includes/ao_example.html" %}
   </div>
 
-<p>We might contact your authorizing official, or their office, to double check that they approve this request. Read more about <a href="{% public_site_url 'domains/eligibility/#you-must-have-approval-from-an-authorizing-official-within-your-organization' %}">who can serve as an authorizing official</a>.</p>
+<p>We typically don’t reach out to the authorizing official, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate with you, the requestor. Read more about <a href="{% public_site_url 'domains/eligibility/#you-must-have-approval-from-an-authorizing-official-within-your-organization' %}">who can serve as an authorizing official</a>.</p>
 
 {% endblock %}
 

From a74ee20bcf072af49c585bf9ae793b71af9bcb23 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Aug 2023 12:34:57 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 3/6] AO wording adjustment

---
 src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html b/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
index 0674b3f7b..60fce85f8 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
     Who is the authorizing official for your organization?
   </h2>
 
-<p>Your authorizing official is the person within your organization who can authorize your domain request. This must be a person in a role of significant, executive responsibility within the organization.</p>
+<p>Your authorizing official is the person within your organization who can authorize your domain request. This person must be in a role of significant, executive responsibility within the organization.</p>
 
   <div class="ao_example">
     {% include "includes/ao_example.html" %}

From 1c60724469dbb83b98b6f88068fc4e64c0c12106 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Aug 2023 12:58:02 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 4/6] Wording adjustments: Other employees

---
 src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html | 6 +++---
 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html b/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
index 2adf0b99c..74568b592 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
@@ -2,10 +2,10 @@
 {% load static field_helpers %}
 
 {% block form_instructions %}
-  <p>To help us assess your eligibility for a .gov domain, please provide contact information for at least two other employees from your organization.
+  <p>To help us assess your eligibility for a .gov domain, please provide contact information for other employees from your organization.
     <ul class="usa-list">
-      <li>They must be employees who are clearly and publicly affiliated with your organization and familiar with your domain request. </li>
-      <li>They do not need to be involved with the technical management of your domain (although they can be). </li>
+      <li>They should be clearly and publicly affiliated with your organization and familiar with your domain request. </li>
+      <li>They don't need to be involved with the technical management of your domain (although they can be). </li>
       <li>We typically don’t reach out to these employees, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate with you, the requestor. </li>
     </ul>
   </p>

From d720670e5fe831a294be602167c9911e13d41d1f Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Aug 2023 15:22:07 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 5/6] AO: add "first"

---
 src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html b/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
index 60fce85f8..2ac99be80 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/application_authorizing_official.html
@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@
     {% include "includes/ao_example.html" %}
   </div>
 
-<p>We typically don’t reach out to the authorizing official, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate with you, the requestor. Read more about <a href="{% public_site_url 'domains/eligibility/#you-must-have-approval-from-an-authorizing-official-within-your-organization' %}">who can serve as an authorizing official</a>.</p>
+<p>We typically don’t reach out to the authorizing official, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate first with you, the requestor. Read more about <a href="{% public_site_url 'domains/eligibility/#you-must-have-approval-from-an-authorizing-official-within-your-organization' %}">who can serve as an authorizing official</a>.</p>
 
 {% endblock %}
 

From 9f37337937a9dd654d464c4996af1700e04bab5b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Mon, 14 Aug 2023 15:22:38 -0500
Subject: [PATCH 6/6] Other employees: Add "first"

---
 src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html | 2 +-
 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html b/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
index 74568b592..679742281 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/application_other_contacts.html
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
     <ul class="usa-list">
       <li>They should be clearly and publicly affiliated with your organization and familiar with your domain request. </li>
       <li>They don't need to be involved with the technical management of your domain (although they can be). </li>
-      <li>We typically don’t reach out to these employees, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate with you, the requestor. </li>
+      <li>We typically don’t reach out to these employees, but if contact is necessary, our practice is to coordinate first with you, the requestor. </li>
     </ul>
   </p>