From 7b3f02d945761cb55d35a901b172161b99bad791 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Katherine-Osos <119689946+Katherine-Osos@users.noreply.github.com>
Date: Tue, 9 Jan 2024 16:34:46 -0600
Subject: [PATCH] Updates to submission email

---
 .../emails/submission_confirmation.txt        | 27 +++++++++----------
 1 file changed, 12 insertions(+), 15 deletions(-)

diff --git a/src/registrar/templates/emails/submission_confirmation.txt b/src/registrar/templates/emails/submission_confirmation.txt
index b25704052..8029ee834 100644
--- a/src/registrar/templates/emails/submission_confirmation.txt
+++ b/src/registrar/templates/emails/submission_confirmation.txt
@@ -1,29 +1,26 @@
 {% autoescape off %}{# In a text file, we don't want to have HTML entities escaped #}
-Hi {{ application.submitter.first_name }}.
+Hi, {{ application.submitter.first_name }}.
 
 We received your .gov domain request.
 
 DOMAIN REQUESTED: {{ application.requested_domain.name }}
 REQUEST RECEIVED ON: {{ application.submission_date|date }}
-REQUEST #: {{ application.id }}
-STATUS: Received
-
-
-NEED TO MAKE CHANGES?
-
-If you need to change your request you have to first withdraw it. Once you
-withdraw the request you can edit it and submit it again. Changing your request
-might add to the wait time. Learn more about withdrawing your request.
+STATUS: Submitted
 
 
 NEXT STEPS
+We’ll review your request. This usually takes 20 business days. During this review we’ll verify that:
+- Your organization is eligible for a .gov domain
+- You work at the organization and/or can make requests on its behalf 
+- Your requested domain meets our naming requirements 
 
-- We’ll review your request. This usually takes 20 business days.
+We’ll email you if we have questions and when we complete our review. You can check the status of your request at any time on the registrar homepage. <https://manage.get.gov>
 
-- You can check the status of your request at any time.
-  <https://manage.get.gov/application/{{ application.id }}>
+NEED TO MAKE CHANGES?
+To make changes to your domain request, you have to withdraw it first. Withdrawing your request may extend the time it takes for the .gov team to complete their review. 
+
+Learn more about withdrawing your request <https://get.gov/help/domain-requests/#withdraw-your-domain-request>.
 
-- We’ll email you with questions or when we complete our review.
 
 
 THANK YOU
@@ -38,5 +35,5 @@ requesting a .gov domain.
 
 The .gov team
 Contact us: <https://get.gov/contact/>
-Visit <https://get.gov>
+Learn about .gov <https://get.gov>
 {% endautoescape %}